Thread: Blanket of Lies
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Old 12-09-03, 03:38 PM   #4
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I thought the line length was fine....but this was alright i thought....made a good read....structure was good in this, just thought you could have added another verse atleast cause it was kinda short though...flow in this was alright...vocab was pretty good as well...overall this was a alright piece here...keep at it.
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