o.O
see, I told you I would reply, hoecake
man...your rhymes seem so forced in the italic portions of the writing, but maybe it's just the different accent. But with some of them....I couldn't even see any similar sounds...oh well.
work on that. but that's my only helpful crit. the rest is all "wow, you're such a good writer" and "have my babies!". Jerk.
Anyways, I actually wasn't expecting the twist at the end...I had figured out that they were relatives, but not that he was the other kid. great work, dood.

Can you acutally order a shot on the rocks? wouldn't ice take up too much of the shot glass?

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