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Old 12-10-03, 03:37 PM   #2
sal-v
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lines were way too long - which threw your flow off

vocab was decent, the nicest part of this was the middle .. try to spit a few multi's here and there if you can .. wouldnt hurt ..

nice concept - it could've been better by making a few twists in it though

overall, decent shit ...

keep it up - elevate

pz..1
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