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Old 12-10-03, 03:42 PM   #5
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But this needs some work like said before me....structure should be line on top of line, instead of paragraph like you have it there...You should make it a little longer as well, it was too short....also try adding some multies to help the flow out...but just keep elevating and keep at it.
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