Nice job fellas.
Aisle, nice way to start the piece off. Your structure is good, but thats something that you need not worry too much about, it just helps making it easier to read. The way you presented your thoughts, your writer's voice, and the amount of implied metaphors made your verse a nice read.
G.Hod, everything I have read from you has a certain level of complexity. Sometimes I need a dictionary. Your vocabulary is definately off the shizzlebulb...(...) Your closing line was incredibly dope, and topped off this wonderful read by both of you. Nice to see something good in O.M

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