Thanks for the feedback, so far few people on here have told me i need finetuning, but how am i gonna do that?

My lyrics slice like a razor tru ur brains
but ur lyrics r like a clipper to my toe nails
You just cant handle my lyrical stress & strain
young boys rapping about blood stains
but so far you've only seen ketchup stains

all bark but no bite,
badbways talking slick & tryin to get their spot in da limelight
not knowing ive got dis $hit locked in my sniper sight

You kids rapping lines about someone's mum
dats why i gave urs sum
Yeah sum of da good $hit,
That's why I got her screaming like that rapper "Gimme sum mo!!"
just like an addicted heroin h0e
Who could have thought I could make her talk like Busta,
or even drown her in vodka
I snuck in da forum like an undacova

U lot aint gangstaz, moving ounces and bars thinkin ur bigtime
that will change once i get u lookin at da barrel of my nine

young fools still in school
tryin to rhyme cool
but u got a lot to learn cos ur sounding like J-Lo's JaRule

U guys just bin watching Shady's DVD
but noobie is da real P.I.M.P

dats why I got ur chick rubbing her lips down my pole
cheap b|tch sold me her soul
got her addicted to blow,
she o-d'd and now her speech is slurred and too slow

Thats why people call me da lethal lyricist,
time for for u to bend over so i can have some fun wid ma fist
no need for me to put u on my hitlist
cos afta dis battle u gona put da knife to ur wrist

Uve been declared dead clinically,
u just couldnt handle my vocabulary,
thats why i own dis forum like da greatest mc
for all you mothertruckers to envy
u all just got dissed by a newbie

Once again: no disrespect to anybody, i hope u like this one.