thought this made for a interesting read, culd have been executed better thought to get it across.....the flow was knocked a bit by the structure.....i would have done away with rhyming the same words on the first bar...as thats what gets ppl absorbed...so....but in general this was ok......with a bit more work...up the vocab n shit....yeah........pZ.....

return the favour on this.....
http://rapbattles.com/forum/showthr...&threadid=98495