^ Make a better reply next time..

But you need to leave 3 links or 3 names of feedback or this will get closed....i noticed that you never leave links/names of replies so..start.

But this was ok....structure was ok...but it needs some work though i think....try keeping your lines around the same length to make it structured good....and to help the flow out....try adding some multies as well...but keep at it.