At first, I wasn't feeling the contrast between the two stanzas/verses; however, upon reading it over, they actually mixed together quite nicely. Even though the topic was somewhat of a self-glorification, you used some nice concept flips and vocabulary to make up for what lacked in the department of content. There was line that I liked in particular:
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And Despite having no forum were still enthralling
Voicing our opinions without verbally calling
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Nice flip there, but as I said, the content was elementary as any: crew forums? Come on, dude. With that type of ability, you really ought to up your standards and find a cause to write for. I'd never heard of you prior to reading this piece, but I'll be sure to keep close tabulations on you - you've got potential. Good Luck.
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