This was an interesting read, to say the least. If I could pick one area to critique, it would be word choice; your conceptual ideas were fairly sound, but I think the luster of the concepts was diminished by some poor phrasing. This had a humorous tone to it as well, although I don't think that it was intentional. . I was humored by the vernacular you so eloquently used to describe being the leader of the free world. For example, would "making the smart-asses become quiet" really be one of the utmost goals on your political agenda? Ah well, continue to work & I see a bright future for you. As I said, work on your phrasing and wording - the only advice I can give you is to proofread. Proofread profusely after writing your piece, and be positive that you wrote exactly what you wanted to write. Good Luck, and God bless.

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