fa real, im feelin the poem. the vocab was good, the metas and similes were sadly painting a picture of hurt and mistrust. the flow was strong at times and then sumtimes got a lil off beat, but hey perfect flow is hard to get. overall id give it a 9.9, beatiful imagery gave it life, and emotion but the tale gave it enough activity that it kept peoples attention. great poem, one of the best ive seen. i would say to keep it up, but i think u already know that. o, and ure from VA? me too, wat part u from?

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