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Old 12-16-03, 12:44 AM   #4
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nice piece i gotta say.....u had a decent vocabulary all throughout....very good structure....this looks like it should be placed into an audio....but u showed alot of emotion and originality...nice piece...here's my favorite line...

Quote:
Best Line From Masta C:
When you said that you loved me and I trusted those lips…
One wrong thing and its over…that’s not justice though bitch..
And I thrusted those hips…for what?….to lose it all…
I thought we had something but I was just a fool that falls..
^^this was tight..u showed alot of emotion most specifically in this part...tight work

BREAKDOWN
Multis - Very Good
Hook - Very Good
Metas - Very Good
RhymeScheme - Excellent
Flow - Excellent
Structure - Excellent
Vocab - Very Good
Originality - Excellent
Emotion - Very Good
Overall - very nice piece....u showed alot of everything...and if people actually read this and catch the feel like i did...then u will get mad props for this work....

RATING
9/10

peace
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