Hmm...
Much elevation room for both of you..
Work on using more metas and clever hard hitting punches
Sex Lines are played-- Never use those..
Never use "s //s or any other symbol

Freebase took this one with better flow and harder hitting punches

Although it was close

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

^ Use structure similar to that.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=98955

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