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Old 12-16-03, 03:08 PM   #3
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Yeah this was ok....your structure was alright, it could use some work thought, cause some of your lines were kinda stretched out there at some spots, Try keeping your lines around the same length to help the flow out...also try adding some multies...but keep at it.
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