It was a decent piece, imagery and content
were both fairly good i thought. You stuck to
the topic and hand quite nicely, the flow was
off for me though, each one seemed to be 2
syllables out, its only a minor thing, but flow
does actually work in text . . and it will read
better to the reader if you give it a nice flow.
But yeah, the transition's were decent, kept
my attention throughout it .. it was worded
fairly well, the only thing i didn't really enjoy
was how you rounded it off. The whole 'gun'
idea didn't seem that well thought out to me,
but aside from that this was felt. Nice piece..
short and yet to the point.


Props.

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