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Old 12-17-03, 04:43 AM   #4
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From: E-Dub
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pretty good....u had kinda a pointless topic.....showed aggression though....decent structure....pretty good vocab...and an overall nice flow....here is ur best line in my opinion...

Quote:
From Se7eN:
Shit You realize I never crawl, think, sink into a mental state
God had you emotionally laid, into a fucked up physical trait
Ok, so Freestylin' off a beat or juss going str8 ocapella
But My words ain't flyin' ,they sorin', juss like disses on roc-a-fella
^^that was pretty straight...u rhymed the most here...and u had a few multis here and there in this part...and roc-a-fella line was coo

BREAKDOWN
Emotion - Very Good (alot of attempted aggression)
Multis - Good
Structure - Very Good
Vocab - Good
Flow - Very Good
Creativity - Good
Consistency - Very Good
Overall - an ok drop....u had some good parts and some bad parts......try using multis more...and some parts of ur verse made no sense whatsoever.....

Rating:
7/10

peace
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