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Old 12-17-03, 04:54 AM   #6
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this was pretty tight in my opinion...ur hook was kinda shit....but the verses were good.....u had some nice vocab, flow, and multis....ur structure was pretty good...i've seen worse.....i think this would make a nice audio...here's the best line out of this...

Quote:
From This Collab:
I'm worldwide now, I'm takin no hostages//
Shove my dick down ya throat, and start rapin esophogus//
We a walkin apocalypse are cocks get licked across the continent//
Death is the consequence 4 nonsense towards the conglamerant//
I'm an accomplished novelist, soon u'll be forced 2 acknowledge this//
Fiercest mob list, can't see that run 2 ya nearest
optomotrist//
^^nice ass vocab and multis....perfect flow also in my opinion...

BREAKDOWN
Consistency - Very Good
Vocab - Excellent
Structure - Good
Flow - Very Good
Multis - Excellent
Emotion - Good
Metas - Very Good (there were quite a few)
Overall - i gotta say this was a pretty good collab u did.....just fix up ur structure and u got this down.....u should also try doing this in audio....

Rating:
8.5/10

peace
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