Thread: dj-20 vs lewd
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Old 12-17-03, 11:00 AM   #49
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I already Voted on this shit
Lewd:
Too easy,maybe one day I'll make money,went easy on this rhyme
A crime?well it should be,destryed dj-20,defenently no next time!


It look as tho you were feeding off his verse which is a no-no. Also, you threw in the 'money' part as filler, never made sence with the rest of your verse.

DJ-20:

swing swing whats with the style of hated dont spit words of intensional haten what you goin to createn fat maten in the hoods of ramming bars mooding cars fuedal lives of yo hood could be out of reach for good never could see what goin on for nothing but a secret of a tampon on for youe ronny shon. best can haten for saken shaken cant relate to my haten . now its your turn for this is your first time be scare becuz nothing will ryme take for a crime ride and hide for you wont beat so go take a seat

A word of advice, because it's 'text' you gotta structure your lines/bars better so we get the flow. To many non-important words that ryhme. Try to build a verse around somth'n instead of just ......ryhme'n.

Vote = Lewd
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