Bospitta dis is pretty good for a first freestyle on da first time, people usually aren't dat good when they start out so I really give you props.

STRENGTHS
what you said was tight and I feel you dawg

WEAKNESSES
Your flow wasn't all dat good but keep praticing and you'll improve, so good job for trying man.

most of da rhymes I read didn't rhyme at all, so make da words like rhymes.

don't set it up like paragraph form cause it makes it hard to rhyme with and choppy, post your rhymes like dis for example(below) so people won't call you a complete newbie dawg.

niggas try hitting me with a pump
I'm gonna roll over dem like a bump


Bospitta try all dat I told you and you should be a nasty rhyme creating emcee dawg, don't ever give up jus practice, practice.





!!GOOD JOB FOR A FIRST FREESTYLE!!

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