Sup G's?

That was some tight shit. Great choice of topic...i enjoyed reading it coz im very political myself.

Formula: Your best lines were: -

"At This Rate, It Probly Is, Look At These Kids
Bones Buldging Out They Body, This Some Serious Shit"

- I can see the image...fuckin sick!

"Make Tropps Fall Back From Iraq N Pack They Homes With Laughs
Not Sorrow Cause At Last The Past Haunts Um N A Soldier's Passed"

- Those 2 lines were ill, one expressed happiness and the other expressed sadness.

"That's The Least You Could Do, Be Ya Own Individual
Politicians Diminish A Witness, Kill Rap?, I'm Not Feelin You
Concentrate On The Problems At Hand Man, Don't Worry Bout Us
We Ain't Tryna Cause A Rush Of Fuss - We Lettin Um Kno What's Up"

- I agree with what u sayin. True shit!

"I'm Well Aware And Hella Scared Of What Has Yet To Come
Check In A Month, I'm Bouncin, Fuck This World, I'm Done"

- Great strong finish. Makes me wanna check out ya new 'pain lyrics' next month.

Weakness: -

"Thong-Lookers" - A serious song with serious lyrics only gets spoiled with words like this. You need to improve your flow.

Masta C: Your best lines were: -

"Cause that's what this world needs, it doesn't need no more death..
Doing your best to bring good but at some point ya know your next"

- Imma bring ma kids up good...but they can still get smoked!

"Cause all of these world situations you just cant avoid no more..
The media brings it right into your own home to just show gore..
Family love grows poor cause its sedated by all of the violence..
Now every home….has just grown….to the moan….of silence…" - These were not only your best lines...but the best lines of the whole song.

Weakness: - The verse was more of a poem then a song.

Chorus: - The last line said it all!

Overall: - Very interesting to read and some tight, true words have been spoken about society today. 8/10.

Tash Shyne.