Sup G?

Good Points: -

The rhyme had a good topic...i was feeling these lines: -

"blood aint always thicker than water" - good, but u should try to expand why u said that.

"now ima end this rhyme, fuck u man i delince ur apologises, so wile u rot ima enjoy ma christmas holidyz............." - That was your best line, funny shit!

Weakness: -

This lacked good wordplay and some of the words u used to rhyme were pathetic. For example: -

"drug him up til hes doped, then proceed 2 hang him wiva scarf and rope"

- This is a serious topic. I understand u want to put some humour in but "scarf and rope" - that isn't funny and it's not serious enough. You only put it in coz it rhymed.

There was also some very childish remarks like: -

"pussy without a clan"

- If 'pussy' is used, make sure it is used with a metaphor or something relating to a woman's clit. Words like 'pussy' and 'bitch arse' on their own are childish.

Your lines are too long, this makes your flow shit. You also need to imrove your spelling, ex. 'gd' - write 'good', otherwise it can get confused for 'god'.

Overall: 3/10.

Tash Shyne