It started out real deep. it got a lil less interesting as it went on, but gettin peoples attention isnt the easiest thing to do. its real good considaring the fact that it didnt rhyme. at sumtimes it rhymed tho, that confused me a bit. (was it meant to rhyme or is it just off?) well good stuff,

vocab-8/10
rhymes-4/10
message-8/10
feelings-7/10
metas/similes-5/10
overall-32/50

final thoughts:good poem, great message, but it left me wanting more.

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