sane - first off, he hsant bitched yet, you have. also the only funny thihng about it is was koolcolb saying werd at the end of all his sentences, which though true, made way for some incredibly forced rhymes and made the piece look sloppy. it wasn't original either, and wasn't very comical.

tk - good vocabulary ,and what you were shooting for, the emotional pangs, was hit more than what sane shot for, the comedy.. better imagery, and mechanics were good as well

v- tk

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