Myself:

Nothing special, but solid verse. I liked the imagery and the story itself. The innocence turning into something dirty is something I think we all face in a relationship. Like I said, nothing special or amazing I can really say, but I liked it and was worth the read.

Lamp:

I really wasn't feeling your approach to the topic until the end and it all made sense. I think had your followed that kind of story better, you could have won. More detail in each person's life, more a view from them, etc... Something that put me in their mind instead of just some person on the sideline.

Myself gets it for more detail, creativity, and overall just a better written verse.

v- Myself

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