The somewhat original content here while creative and actually brilliantly written in some places, was overthrown by the use of '2' and 'B4' etc.. Using abbreviations like this really does your writing no justice at all. Maybe as you are writing it first draft.. but certainly not as a finished product.

Your idea was great.. and as I said in some places it excels, creatively speaking, but try and word it properly. If you want respect for your work, you must show respect for your work.

Language is a powerful tool if used correctly.

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