ive actually fed this peice at rb man....once again the short lines slowed down the process of the emotion a bit but no biggie, the imagery was good as usual, the vocab basic/decent in my eyes, the metaphore's that were rarely but surely used in this was tasty the topic/concept was cool and made for and exciting and certainly interesting read dude, still room for improvement man....but your elevating greatly with every peice keep it up family looking forward to viewing more pieces

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