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Old 05-07-07, 09:42 PM   #6
Lungz
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Light Houses Verse

Damn... weird topic, but ok...

Since when did Tebo start movin up? Psssh... I don't know what that's bout
But he must be high on life... living in a renovated crack house
Stayed on topic with the opener, but nothing hard hitting
You pink pussy. Supposedly a dude, but you must got your mother's genes
We know you gay, but you aint have to display it with the color scheme
Hahaha, this one is a funny use of the pic/house and area around it, decent bar
There's no security. I know your money's diminshed, you're most robbed
No wonder you couldn't even pay the motherfucker to finish the mulch job
Hahaha, nice hit on the surroundings, I liked that one..
Look like it aint rain in years, umbrella's rusty, I figure it's a drought
But I got one question... How the hell's the pool bigger than the house?
Hahaha, hot bar, flow worked and setup and punch hit the topic head on..
It's piece of shit, ugly, weak, dirty, puny. Damn, it's like a mega mix.
All the kids hate him... this house made Toys R Us run out of Lego bricks
HAHAHAHA, this ones nice man, another dreat description and metaphor for the houses look..
You dirty bastard. Goin 16's a lot, but you've been forgiven, now its cool
But judging from the water's color, Tebo musta been livin in the pool!
Lol, this looks good, but honestly im not feeling it…Too easy of a topic
He's a fuckin pig, he swears its a pool house, and defies all the bull
But it's not just a house, it's where his fatass comes to hide from the wolf
LMAO!!!!!!!!! NICE metta here man, I really liked it..
Tebo's on top, automatic. Got a big ego, but he's not a fanatic
Even though Tebo looks down on all of us...cuz he stays locked in the attic
Naw….its a pool house man, u making it seem like the empire state building in height…
16. Good Luck.

Hard Hitting Bars: 4
Decent Bars: 2
Bars Needing Improvement: 2


Pool Houses Verse

My place has bitches@summer & yours is always like ya picture here ^
You won't see one flash... you haven't had a working light FOR years
Lol, decent bar to open with sticking to the topic directly, nothing huge though to direct the pase
Kick this shit where it'll break, your a grown boy stop puffin
Could put ya place on Cribs... atleast ontop as a toy or somethin :\
Naw, not feeling this, nothing special and weak on the topic…need more complexity
Fixed ya house to float but now your in a handyman slump
My pad's a chill spot for chicks, yours is to hold the candycane up
Hahaha, decent punch here on the scheme of the lighthouse, nothing unexpected though…
Willing to put up with middleage men & have propper talk
Stop beating around the pole... & go buy the whole barber shop
HOLY FUCK!!!!!!!!!!!!! This bar is dope yo, for peple that don’t know, outside barber shops are those pole like things covered with glass or w.e….NICE hit on the pic
Your in a violation zone, leavein the scene delt & welted
Lookin at the twists on this cone, you turned for the worst & it fell 'n melted
Decent again, but nothing really special…need more umph
I got an idea BUT I'll drop it to view, what I bittered as false
Losein the only workin lightbulb it'd no longer be a house, just 1 twisted wall
Again, decent, but still not that second break away bar, not enough effort…
Beating you down & ya place proves theres nowhere to turn or run
You'll need a cane to walk, just like how you'll always walk into one
Lolol….decent play on the colors again but u already commented on that in a previous bar, so this is was just decent
The top@the right I shoved ya in the grill & burned ya, too tall for a heist
Smoked Coop 'round ice, hes locked'n caged in<-& startin to musk THE awfull spice
Nothing special here, weak closer and too simple..
16. You too Coop.
Edit: Fixed spellin word error
Edit: Tha pic stopped workin for like 5 mins.


Hard Hitting Bars: 1 {But it was the best bar of battle}
Decent Bars: 5
Bars Needing Improvement: 2


Overall:

Best use of bars-Pool House
Punches-Lighthouse
On Topicness-Lighthouse {Just did it better}
Flow-Tie
Multies-Tie
Mettas-Tie

Vote-Well, this was a pretty close battle, but pool house just got outweighed. Lighthouse managed to come with 4 above average bars, with only two below average ones. Though pool house had the best bar of battle, he also had a lot less other hard hitting bars {none actually} and just had a lot of average bars. So in coming just a little stronger I have to give the vote too Lighthouse AkA Coop.
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