i like this lil om, stucture was real good and as was your flow. the vocabulary was used a lot in this one, emotion coulda been upped though. you coulda brought more creativty, if your gonna use all that vocabulary you might as well put it to work and add some eternal multiples in there. theres no point in all that vocab without multiples ya know. imagery was very good. just a nice lil piece man

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