Brandon



Weak wordplay won't get you anywhere, quit the charades
I say you're Cool with ladies cause damn you been Bitchen for days
This was ok, Worded smoothly. overall concept was meh
I'd ruin your rep, but there is just nothing to tarnish man
So if anyone was to lay fear...they'd be fuckin a garbage can
Meh, wording. Ok line


Lay


No matter what this chump talks, I'm sure Brandon will find doubt
cuz 'paperback' a book?..
...its what he can afford for replacement, after we rip his spine out
Wasn't a bad concept, but extremely forced and badly worded

You can't escape the carnage..I'm a rebel n C' hates to be chokin..
You try to resist the analogy?..shit, 'LAW's' were made to be broken
This concept is played. Wording was good though


Dude, i see so much potential in lay, its not funny. Straight up. really descent concepts and overall thoughts on your wording. Just put things in order better, and investigate whats really already played. Brandon you were straight overall. simple, but enough


v.Brandon

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