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iight...
Strong message your getting through there... Its so true...
Imagery was good... You can picture him standing there...
A like the flip on how the crop was the disease... Make me think... How fortunate we are in countries such as the UK and USA...
Good vocabulary... Really made the piece hotter... Good...
Flow wasnt consistent... Your rhyme scheme was very different... But it worked...
Im guessing your experimenting...
Keep it up man... Nice piece with a strong message...
Hit up the links in my sig...
Thanks...
Pz...
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