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Old 04-25-07, 02:38 PM   #6
DiZzy
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From: New Jerz
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Saw the matchup here n' knew I was set dude
Like mother like son...
...n' yo momma so easy, its why i'm 3-0 against you

this was a decent punchline. kind or predictable but an easy concept to use.

That's one hideous bitch man, I'm out swingin' too
Yo momma's the claim of smokin' commercials, the uncool thing to do
You will fail, n' that ho of ur mom looks real pale
Yo momma so fat, she runs away from lizards...
... she doesn't want to be ANYWHERE near scales

solid way to close with these bars. good creatity

overall your versed came off rushed. you came creative with the last 4 bars but it was wak that the bulk of your punches were fat jokes ya feel me. decent verse though those were just what i thought were your weak points

vs

U n ya ma both fold under pressure, yal niggas fall in the crunchtime
Yo momma so stupid, she thought Busta Rhymes referred to ur punchlines

goood idea with the busta rhymes. i just think it could be used better yanamean. it doesnt get the full affect as a "so stupid" punchline

I truly feel sorry for her son, n with that said i understand the denial
Cuz yo momma such a slut, she'll b on mental funk as next week's top files

haha good creativity. i should have thought about makin a punch about dat shit

Think you'll be 3-0 against me??? someone must've gassed this jew
But shit, yo momma so dumb.....n prolly writes just as shitty as you

this was on some preschool shit

Thought she might've been hot, but then found out she was hairy n.....
I ain't fuk the pig-headed broad, so niggas thought i was a vegetarian
She a hoe n not ta mention she gullable, just read n see.....
Got the bitch wearin a dog tag wit her name, address, and "Owner's Name: Tony B"

these were jus corny. try to get more creative mah dood

decent battle not as hot as i thought it would be with to of the "top heads" in the league battlin or w/e. no hate or nothin but trus came more fresh wit the concepts

v//datrushurts
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