I feel like my eyes are bleeding reading so fuckin much.

Rev.

This was genious lmao.
You used the topic to FULLEST perfection, before the actual story the structure (intro book references etc) was also decent.
Your rhyming was more or less consistant throughout although not many multis, emotion was consistant although the 1st section after the intro was the most solid. You had solid metas and similies used too and your vocab was advanced throughout.
It was long as fook but still appeared fresh. Best topical verse ive ever read.

Sappho

Personally i aint feelin the poetry style you went for, but as i read it it allows you to express your concept better. It was packed with decent imagery that gets our minds intrigued lmao, It didnt have a lots of similies but there were decentt metas, your vocab was consistant and the best part of this piece was the emotion you packed into it. This was a solid verse, and it was amazing but still i dont think up to par to revs.

Sappho came amazing and on another day it wouldnt have been beaten, but i can clearly tell rev wanted the win more, his verse was the best i read.

No hate.
V./ Rev

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