^^^^ the people who left rubbish feed back like... hot mayne..
are moron's if i catch you doign that again i'll just bann you from this forum . . please leave real feedback.
This is poetry.
I say this because it would be impossible to make a song.
You've squeezed too many word's into one bar to try & increase vocab.
I mean, it's good no dout but not even twista could make that an audio.
i also realised you used a smaller font
Anyway on content it was like a name with 3 topic's..
You did have multi's there . . alot which made it hard to understand your topic.. multi's are good but to many make what people read confusing
Quote:
Charging at me starting to put my guard up to retard his motives
Look quickly to my right and start at my nife since I had no clips or bullits
Pull it out and reach out to ground as I duck, jump and rip threw him
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This is cool . . Although i think motives and bullet's is a half assed rhyme . . which could have been thought about better
Quote:
[Goodnight]]
Now The Battle Comes To Hault
Fields Clearing But My Pain Still Vaults...
Hop This Horse And Pace The Brain...
God Willing One Day I'll Move Away From Pain...
But As For Tomarrow...
I'll Break Again Scarred From Our War...
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I think this was a good chorus.. it's the only thing i really understood over the open mic's name.
Overall
it's not the best i've seen .. because many rhymes were forced and not all self-explained
Quote:
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Two hits to my face drops me like eight bricks slowing my pace
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Maybe because i'm english... but i dont understand this you'll need to explain this . . to me.
overall 7.7/10 it's a good score.. my average is 6.77/10.
peace.