DQ: Wow at the structure, it's kinda scary. Your verse was ok, nothing wow worthy, but ok. Imagery was good but the emotion was lacking. Wasn't really feeling it your words. The concept was somewhat original, but not an amazing twist. Kept me reading though, vocab was balanced well.

KH: Get rid of the // first of all. Those are really annoying, now your verse. Flow was choppy in some parts, and just totally off in others. Your vocab was aight, it fit the verse well so props on that. I was waiting for someone to write bout Katrina, but original take. Just work on wording your ideas and concepts.

v- DQ

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