I’m the shit you aint heard before this mans the retard you would pay to ignore, going against me was a major flaw.
I’m not Lennox Lewis but I’ll break your jaw, I’m high above you like I’m on Thai draw leaving this illiterate fagot in awe.
your opening is alright.. You start with two alright multis for your verse but the bars seem overdrawn. The punchs are alright, nothing to specil though, same with the metaphors
Don’t mess with me because you don’t want the drama, split you in half like a banana make sure you’ll suffer, like I’m bad karma.
Don’t need to hear your lyrics I know you’ve flopped, your sixteen years old and your balls aint dropped
the follow through is an alright punch. good personal shot. the set could came off alot better with the wording though. the karma part was a decent concept
You think your xplicit, you just spasticated, I’ll give this retard so much abuse it should be illicit.
I’m not politically correct, this queer deserve the abuse I’m vending. One things for certain your life won’t have a happy ending.
alright punchs here.. follow through isnt bad but needed more of a connection towards the end i thought
Blood’s thicker than water, but water is thicker than mine. You know your dead when you hear the church bell chimes.
not digging the ending seemed filler ish
Over all your verse was alright, you came with some nice multis through out the verse, along with punchs, although they werent hittingfor the hardest they were still there with decent metaphors i guess.
u think u idlin to greatness but heres a factor or *2*//
u said yah *new* but already the wackness caught up to *u*//
opening could have used a rewording or two.. the follow through wasnt bad
blabberin words to urself or whatever u call *rappin*//
yah life n ur record's the only thing u'll be *scratchin*//(his avy)
follow through had a nice personal on it, set punch was sort of weak through
brighter and hotter then the ever lovin *heat*//
I'll be satisfied when yah dead and yah heart stops to *beat*//
seemed kind of fillerish here
u formally known as livin proof of a pathectic *sucka*//
I'm the reason ur moms gon be poppin u a new *brotha*//
the metaphor on the follow through was sort of play depending on how you looked at it. the punch seemed like it needed more
gleemin screams of *fright* through yah nightmares at *night*//
in the dark, where I was born *right*-ready-2-*fight*//
not much of a way of punchs here
raindrops drip in despite of yah life bein *discarded*//
it rains *harder* as I speak but the storms juss *started*//
fillerish type
ma buisness is *out* the whole worlds bout to find *out*//
how u stand as a man but yah sex status is in *doubt*//
nice punch on the follow through
I aint gotta lie or stutta u the worst rappa *alive*//
no need to *hide* but its surprisin for this long u've *survived*//
the follow through needed a little rewording to help out the punchs strength
yah road ends career juss simply cuts *short*//
bad nuff u got yah dreams but now yah life to *sort*//
eh could have held a better punch
I didnt try, against u this shit was juss for *fun*//
now its time to *run* all the way back to where u came *from*//
Ending could have used a punch more
Over all ya verse had an ok flow to it but wasnt that smooth at times. Your punchs started pretty good then fell off towards the ending. MEtaphors needed a little bit more through out your verse.
Vote- Xplicit
For the fact Idle you needed more direct punchs in your verse, X seemed to hit with more and harder ones through out his verse.
Peep this and drop an honest vote yall
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