Man, this was fucking incredible. People will rag on you for your rhyme scheme and structure, but i thought it was near flawless. I loved the way it flowed and the story was bold as hell man. I think you'd be a decent song writer if someday you made the transition to rock, you seem to have that kind of writer's edge. The vocab was great, multis were unreal throughout, not soo many that you'd lose your head over it and forget what your reading, but enough to go "ooooh". nice.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=209299

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