SLUGGA
dont put the /s at the end of ur lines...its newbish...dont type in all caps either...cause it looks gay...structure is decent...flow fell off a little...u had no multis...no good wordplay...none of ur punches connected...no good personals...

schema
structure was ok...ur lines were stretched though...flow fell off a little due to the stretchnes...u had a few multis...wordplay was decent...some of ur punches connected...personals were pretty good...

Overall
both had a decent structure...both had an alright flow...schema had more multis...better wordplay...more connecting punches...and better personals...so basing off of that...schema gets my vote...

VOTE - SCHEMA