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Old 02-03-05, 04:17 PM   #14
~Luciano~
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U had a nice drop here ma..but u can work on expressing your self better
try 2 use words that no one else would exspect you to put there
your emotion was good..but dont focus on u so much
try 2 throw diff life and death scenarios in there..so it can cover the whole
topic..dont jus use words like "I" cuz thats jus focuseing on u
try 2 put it from another persons point of view or tell the story of someone else

Anxiety
nice ass drop...u didnt focus jus on u ..u used a broad range of ideas
asked questions...replied 2 those questions and moved on with the topic
u had nice wordplay and imagery..when u can see in your head what
they are talkin about then u kno its good imagery...you had nice emotion
sumthin i need 2 work on...overall this was a close battle
but u edged her out bye a few

*Nuff Said*
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