Not Bad, Not Brilliant...

I Thought tha overall rhyme shceme couldve been tightned up a notch or 2...

Imagery as pretty good throughout though...and vocab was used here n there...

Started off with too many Tion rhyming words...they are growing so old..they just aint fun to read/listen too...

Try and keep your mind focused on concept all tha way thru your pieces, dont let tha mind wander, keep tha path wide, but apparent...ya know...

All in all, not bad, but couldnt used some more work...

Keep on postin & elevating yopur mentals..

Take care...

Peace n god bless.