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Voted For: Elemental Soul
Tainted
Now who does this jerk-off think he is, he's a joke,
Before self-oral he was amazed with the wonders of deepthroat
wasnt feeling the opener.
Down on his knees lickin' his fingers between gulps
And he plays with his gun, can't keep his mouth off the nozzle
Seen him walkin' from Jim McGreavy's house, forgetting to gargle
that third meta/multi throws the flow way off
And why is he here, he has no business in rap,
Should be in a masturbation circle, fondling his jockstrap
not played, but not good either
Think you fall in to the straight group, your in the wrong margin
The rhymes so complex that they leave you lathargic
at least if had a punch to it, ill give you that
Look peeps,Never knew Slim Shady had got breast enlargements
again, the third line thing isnt working
Elemental Soul
Brooklyn kid reppin Nas,only online tho,pussy betta pause,
Ya only chance to wrap,is if u worked for santa clause,
ya got a smirk, decent opener
Ya rhymes are infected,yet not sick while tainting,
Cuz ya bein torn to peices,like picaso paintings,
set up line was good
I see the bitch in you thru my computer,little like a splinter,
This soft tittie can only get as hard as nipples in the winter,
trying to compare him using HARD analogies, played
Ya flow's as bad as a broken faucet,u need a plumber,
You wouldn't shine if u wore a golden helmet in the summer,
these two lines were talking about somthing completely different. stick to a rhyme scheme, (plot)
I know your the stereo type,a bitch who thinks he's ghetto,
Well ya blocks wouldn't be hot,even if u burned legos,
closure was decent as well, if the last line was a little more lengthened this would have been good
vote: elemental soul
return the favor, seriously. then leave a link to another one of your battles.
http://community.rapverse.com/showb...ad.php?t=147152
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