This is a different ball game nigka and you should bounce right off the court
Your supposed to be dead its no wonder why ya dad didn’t pay child support
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I was tryna figure were you used that line, I like it. as an opener it is strong,brought my attention up, I didnt read ti then be like.......blah this is gonna be boring.

You’re still alive I guess ur mom was so hooked on my dick she forgot to abort
No musical talent is wif you even playing the guitar is ya very last resort…
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not a strong diss on the grounds of , the guiter is dope man. lol.
but yeh this isnt the best bar.

I mean ya fake posing ass wouldn’t know real talent if it kissed you in the face
You’re a mutha fucking foreigner and I don’t feel digust for you cuz of ya race
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This is still flowing well, but once again this sint realy a strong diss,using a similie would of gone well here.

You hate you fake and made a big mistake and I can’t relate when you call me fake
Face it nigka your B4L bullshit beats are too basic, getting pussy on face-pic
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medium diss, the rhyme scheme change's int his bar,so it kinda messes the flow, but not much. rhyme's are ok,could of been alot stronger.

You’re too small to notice little kid and you get kicked out on the fucking streets
Now see I didn’t even have to endeavor to beat you I just did being discreet
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ok closure, but again you could of come alot stronger.


try using metaphor's adn simlie's to get the reader thinking. A good peice is when some1 read's a punch or a diss and may have to stop, put two and two together then be like, ohhhhh. feel me?

also bring your technicallity up in your rhyme's.

flow is good, no stretched bar's, just one change of rhyme scheme were I pointed out.


parrelel im not gonna break your verse down, only done legend's cause he asked me.

But your's is dope aswell. keep dropping.

who the fuck is scarfacexxl anyway?