Gege
Phrantik
Camarac
Shiznit
Deacon

Im not one of them however i am voting:

first off content:
A Spoken Word Piece..The Pauses Are Deliberate)

Dear God...and realest friends ive crossed paths with,

Salutatuions patrons....i'm a sinner with ongoing self conflictions
Why are the fights like these..attempts at living righteously
Render myself almost content when the night light leaves
This citys illuminated manuscripts contain my pipers dreams!..:sighs:

you kno how i picture this peice? You standing firm and tall in front of a podeum of thousands and thousands of people this is a speech of poetry not just a poem but a preach
..:sighs:..Im a six foot one eighty blispanic irish indian...walking!...fucking!...:sighs:...pillbox!,
That lovely rich pharmacists perscripted daily planner fingertiped distributed from
Your self contributed abilities to uplift the will to live in me !!!", damn yallz..what a ventriloquist!!
i love the diffrent nouns u used you brought in so many different things to relate to not only people but things objects everyday items that we have seen before it added so much variety to your peice

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i love the number reference to put things in that chronoligical order makes it simple for us and if pehpas we reach that number age wise we are realting to the piece which helps our personal understanding in the end
These tarnished wings need refurnished for flight away to a brighter day
MY ABSOLUTE favortie line of your peice i loved that line so much





(A finale of sorts...he murmurs to himself quickly(say fast*))
you would be a great coffe lounch opetic story teller you kno that TH ECOFFEE buisiness would be booming and youd be rich n famous the vivd vibe is so strong thorught this entire peice your simply amazing

"Cloud Nine!" companys comforting, no dreams! no worries! no movies!, I live my own!,
My life!"Cloud Nine!"
the cloud 9 refernce is great its like the FINAL thing we all want is to be happy have everything go great for us and to realize that WOW this is heaven (reference to cloud) great usuage of words
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(His head had slowly tilted back before remaining in something similar to a fetal position taking control of his own kismet to bring forth a deep eternal slumber..severed wisdom...mi stories finished)
mi stories
finished is wow because you never kno its you tell then and yet it still may not be its hard to differtiate between teh characters the word kismet is one im not familiar with i suppose i will have to go look that up[b]


MADD:
Why?
[b] a nice easyintro that leds to the mystery of your peice
To these ends I meet my demise, an yet all of you have been there…
reminds me of tupac in the even of my demise....great follower to the WHY statement

I love you all, and always have…countless joy have you brought me since each your birth…
i just felt that that was beautiful it made me think of when a new mother finally gets to hold her child and all pain and what not is forgotten by the glance of th enew child
There are no words I can explain verbally…but can bee seen through joy and mirth…
Toward these ends…these ends, the corruption of blood, I am cursed…
that was nice right there THESE ends when in allreality there is only One true end...that itself being death and depending on your belif there may be no end (ie. reserection and such)
But dare you leave me like this now? Why, I created you all… you were to be my successors!
that is strong that SHOULD BE the point where you hear yelling you hear the voice of the speaker/writer/ character



Can you not see? I can…I have seen it in each and every of your eyes…
This is how you shall leave me? This is your way of showing your gratitude?
bold simply bold statement making me personally realize that hey shaynea maybe your not as grateful as you should be


I hold the keys…the secrets that you seek…I am the absolute being that can open the gateway!
And you hold me from achieving this last, my attempt in what time I have left among you?
and there we have the writings in teh bible all teh attempts the failures the succeedings everything that was ever done great refernce

I wish your wings to burn, just as the dwelling to which I have been restrained to, through mind, body, and, soul…

for the wings to burn i belive is the ending DEMISE for the character its as if the wings are burned then death will soon folllow
May my spirit haunt you!…may my soul exceed that of these walls to daunt onto you all!!
Come one…come all…my rise shall be the coming of all your fall…
And I……………. i cannnot descrpe how important this was to the structure and overall look of your peice its something that cant be heard, cant be felt, but can be seen and it added so much UNIQNESS to the presentation of the entire peice
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The words of the fallen Damien transcend through the dark caves only to land upon def ears….


great job and im in awe ( i find myself like that alot lately)

THIS WAs EVEN harder than th elast one to vote on and its so hard because i loved both so much and i kno when you read IT WAS SO HARd your prolly thinking shes jsut saying that cuz everyone says that but im being honest it is really difficult to decide and based on my personal poinion i lean madd preachers way for his unique references and beautiful writing