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Old 05-08-05, 03:48 PM   #9
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Sir-pies (suprised) you fit in anything, fucking chubby toad
You'd rip me style? pshh... maybe if ya got in my wardrobe
^^decent concept, couldve elaberated more but ok opener...7.5/10
Elastics as bracelets, shoe's with no lases, this cows poor? NO SHIT!
I'd say the grass is greener on the other side...
BUT, troop ate all of it!
^^lol,.this was pretty solid, set up n punch was koo.....7/10
C'mon mista pimp, aint been with the ladies, we know what your about
Last time a girl opened her window of oportunity...
It was to kick you out!
^^decent bar, ........6/10
Make threads about "game" ROFL!!, your fat, and poor to
So it's safe to say your win won't workout.. kinda like you
^^couldve been better, but still decent.......6/10
I'm cold hearted like jack frost, your saggy tits... you drop soft
And.. this guy dosn't have gizzly lines, but he'll still bear a loss
^ok, wordplays kinda played thou...........5/10
People predicted you'd win? Duke, I aint one to be trifled
So ya, even I would pick you!............. Out with my rifle
^ok, closer was funny but wasnt hard hitting...5/10
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overall you had a solid verse, i marked very hard on this drop
cuz technically you couldve elaberated alot more on your
concepts, some nice personals, but then some wordplay was
rather used or played. good verse thou...if this was a fl battle verse
it wouldve been a good read,.........overall good job.....
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We all can see you Heavily Unstable Like Fats that Lacked and Slipped
Pocketing Condoms from Walmart was the Last time u Jacked and Ripped
^^decent opener,stretched thou,...concept was good.......6/10
Trust me Pussy you cant Move Me...... and i kno u cant move the Truest
Ya careers gonna be like Fat Joes Comeback..U rarely can move the Units
^^wasnt really feelin this line much...need more complexity....4/10
Guarantee you Lose and you Nervous.u pre Writ all day jus to Stop Night
Cuz Putting Can's Stretched Face in ya Sig....Only time u can Drop Tight
^^nah,.forcing your ryhme sceme & not makin sense with ya setups..4/10
And i Believe im Right..That your a Dike. and Winning? Ya Lucks Hardly

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Originally Posted by Jack The Ripper
Well Hello Im a Fag named Jack and i wanna "Fuck R.v"
^^setup was ass, but the quote was raw, couldve been a dope punch...5/10


What Kinda Anal "Ripper" Digs up 5 Month old MugShotz.You Ben.Played
My Pics on ya Wallpaper Probly..You like Ewings Knees...You Ben.Gay'ed
^^wordplay was nice, setup was iffy thou.......................6.5/10
Stop Frontin Pussy... You Allergic 2 Success so you Basically Hate Win'z
Wheres Ya Pics Bitch..Jack's Style's like my Sig Kid..Basically u Hate Jim'z....*Gym*
^^weakest bar in my opinion in your whole verse.....3/10
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28.5/60
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overall you had 2 good concepts but didnt capitalize on them,
the quote couldve been written much better as could the ben'gay line
your setups and choppy flow is what killed your verse, your punches
sometimes were non existent, you seemed to rush this verse and try to
get to wordy with it...
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90% of jacks verse was pretty fresh "good" concepts,
about 40% of troops verse was fresh "good" concepts...
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no hate, call it as i read it.pz
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!