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Old 08-02-04, 09:41 PM   #12
Know-Gimix
The Ups and Downs of Life
 
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Voted For: DV8

Willys verse was pretty dope, i liked the story line you went with on it, but i just thought these lines from DV8 were stronger....


I was young but I knew that I wanted to raise you as my own,
Cause I never wanted your precious little heart to feel alone,
And although there is no biological tie between use that binds,
There ain’t no blood test that can tell me you ain’t mines,
And Its never been kept a secret who your real father is,
But that bastard don’t even know what your favourite colour is
When you have a bad dream, you scream my name not his,
Sometimes I wounder if you found me or if I found you,
Your lifes already been hard enough, I see the strength in you,
So you see our life and immediate family is priority,
Im here for support n I’ll never try ta come done like authority,
The older you get, the closer we get, its actually hard for me,
Cause I gotta realistically look upon tomorrow n be bothered,
I dread the first time your mad at me and say “your not my real father”


Dady ill never say that…..no honey..its just a proven fact….. -

This had raw emotion- it was real, and i like readin shit like this alot, you flowed pretty well and there was alot of different feelings thrown in this- i could feel the loyalty in the story- dope peice stay up... 1
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