aiight first off danksta, fix ya structure, jus write in normal lines, like lights out, an keeps em bout same length.
lights out please dont leave your caps lock on!!!


danksta
nice multies, and some witty punches.

best punch

Im BASHIN-YA-NECKS with ACTIONS-OF-TECHS--ill start wit a SLASHIN-OF-CHEST, then make ya 'breathe deeply' till you LACKIN-A-BREATH!!


jus some didnt quite hit as hard as you maybe wanted it too.



lights out
you had a few multies, some of your lines seemed a lil forced an some were filler.

best punch

AND I AIN'T PLAYIN, JUST AIMIN AT YA FACE STOPPIN YA STUNT
I'M REALLY LOADED, U STILL SHOOTING AT TV'S PLAYING DUCKHUNT



but danksta gets my votes his punches, were direct, hit harder an had a air of complexity, unlike lights outs pretty simple verse.

not a very good battle though,
jus keep elevatin!!!

peace

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