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Old 09-10-08, 04:56 PM   #4
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Rain is a poor excuse. Your explanation was terrible.

The poem is best without an explanation, & the last two lines were boring and bland. I tried to piece it all together but it was kinda meh at the end. Sorry.

However I'm sure this qualifies as a shortly above average poem, depending on your creative writing class, afterall, people have taste for even the shortest and quickest poems. This was short, yet medium to slow.

Oh, and you had absolutely no tone.

peace.
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