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Originally Posted by St.Mad Knight
Growing to a young adult saying bye to years of adolescent
Arise of a new dawn,a sea which was once more fluorescent
I can talk unlike my simple friends of the under water ocean
Once just a love for the water and creatures, turned into a devotion
But know this is when my life gets turned upside down……
As a few years passed on an what so ever normal noon
Briskly swimming behind my friends,forming a platoon
But suddenly a fleet of waves crash upon many others
The once subtle blue now a tar black, all smothered
My friends disappeared look for others, no-one to be seen
An awful scene as I see a battered open leaking marine
As much time had pasted….
Many still get on with normal life, but still unseen to death
Living everyday the same just living to the last breath
I guess which is an oil still lie upon the oceans surface
Stand and embrace, I only utter one word ‘Disgrace.’
But as I see that the oil that we drink is not taking its toll
Trying to reach the soul,making them bigger,not under control
Over time I see that their fins which now more like wings
I see some of the fish try a spring,just see what tomorrow brings
But when I wake….
As I wake to what looks like an untouched ocean scene
Things still purely unseen, as my house is now so clean
But I look in the direction of the sun to watch & explore
Last left fish swims franticly towards a sun ridden shore
Unknown leap as I had got closer, now what in my mind
Never seen by mankind,images in my brain I try to rewind
The once swimming fish now glides through soft blue skies
Heart falls to my feet with this so now unwanted surprise
Subtly fall to the oceans floor, as I hold my head in my hands
If you could only see my tears trickle down my eyes,to their fate
Once happy booming life,falling to its death,left to degenerate
The beautiful days when I used to swim with the fishes
Now alone mermaid left to wallow in my saddest wishes |
danm nice drop, you stood on topic, very creative with this topic i like the build up the image in my head was def a good one flow smoth like the twist towards the end looks like u took time to really vent ya thoughts nice drop all around 8/10
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Originally Posted by Mystic Chaos
Swimming With The Fishes
As I lay in bed, submerged beneath my blankets
Pondering about life itself how One goes through anguish
Loved ones are taken seeing how life is not promised
Atleast not to my loved one that is my uncle thomas
Encountering agony pain as life for him is subsiding
Doc says life for him is short as I feel my life colliding
Currently aware of the circumstances subltely walking
Conversation not current as I have no appetite for talking
A sea of grief crashes in my head like the tide
Watching him in despair fearing the worst I cry
Wanting to share his goals as I get my gear ready
His goal being deep sea diving sitting tight and steady
Goggles propped over my head ready for the first mission
Taking a gander at my surroundings ready to continue the tradition
Soaring quick in the air bursting into the cool brisk water
Glistening in the sun, the crystals glare as I see a passing otter
Mysterical reefs so colorfull as starfish lay apon the oceans surface
Life under water is remarkable its serving a full life purpose
Fastly realizing Ive been entraped under water for quite some time
Uncle will be waiting, I shall awake him with the astonishing news of mine
Walking apon the railing not hesitating opening the room door
Gasping for air is my uncle as he squirms like a rat on the floor
Devastated to what im seeing no reaction due to the amount of shock
8:40 his death time I was unable to save my love from his breath lock
Cremated he will be his ashes to symbolize his true love of ocean
Quitley dumping them in myself no room for noise or commotion 4 YEARS LATER
Continuiously diving the waters yet to find a good keeping
As my metal detector gets louder of a nonstop beeping
I dive deeper to configure the beep as I come to a sudden hault
Seeing a large pink pearl covered in a load of ocean salt
Thinking twice in my head could this be why he took diving classes?
Double taking at the salt realizing what it is....its my uncles ashes
A sign of love, yet a sign of fortune he has guided me to his wishes
Now living in my uncles dream I shall for ever swim with the fishes |
wow, this was a great drop, i love the whole apporch you took on this with ya uncle and pearl, shit was crazy good, flow nice stood on topic had a nice image in my head you discrib every step clearly the emotion was here love the twist towards the end man this is one of the best drop i've seen from you good drop and hope to read more from you.. 9.5/10
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