Wow. excellent wording in both bars by flow. I've never seen
the first concept. I thought it stood out, not really harsh.
but good.

Lay both of your bars had great wording as well, but just
wouldn't qualify as harsh punches to me. You need to add
a little bit more umph. into them.

Flow 2nd bar was good as well. fresh/good flip


v/Flow

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