This def a nice read

OSB:

Proving I'm right, obscure brightness isn't a viewable light,
Like sun off a glacier, moving sluggishly but a beautiful site,

Beautiful simile + visual

Soooth flow some subtle multis that def helped it flow smoooth

Drakel
i know im not perfect, but every new stride i glide closer to the light
connect with the tide, taking notes while listening to the ocean recite

Nice way to finish ur verse

Also some nice flow

Overall an enjoyable read . respect
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