This wasn't bad. Certainly not like blunt put it.
Some rhymes are... latent. They can be consider matches, but it's not "tight". The easiest thing to fix is pulling filler to make the flow better and have a better ratio of iller:filler.
Shit like:

this dude whos ment to be some big bouncer some cool dude
he betta now watch out cause if we see himhe wont be eating food/

Not a bad punch, but do you need some of this. "If we see him" for example. And the "some" double-up... I don't know. Not for me.

But it's cool man. Sometimes it's hard to stay on it about realness. Cock/Glock are easy to rhyme.
Sorry about your uncle, good luck returning the favor.
Keep working. Peace.

PS! That last line wasn't cool man...